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October 22, 2005

about teaching writing

I figured it might be a good time to repost this bit from the FAQ page for more general consumption:

Q: I have been working on a novel for quite a while now and I would so much appreciate input. Could you possibly find time...?

I get mail now and then from readers who are working very hard on their own stories. These are people who are struggling with the very issues and questions and doubts I faced some years ago, and that I still face, in a different way, today. I understand very well what they are experiencing but the help I can offer is limited.

It is a great responsibility to read the work of aspiring authors, and it is also a delicate, involved, and time consuming one. When I have a piece of work in front of me, I hold a person's hopes and dreams in my hands. The wrong word or approach could crush those aspirations.

This is true no matter what the relationship. I exchange work with my best friend, and we both step carefully even though we give each other honest criticism. Over tea I can say to her "This just doesn't work for me," or "The transition here falls short" and she will not be crushed, because she knows that I respect her and her work. She can say to me "You just can't use that name, it evokes too many associations to X" or "You've used this image before" or "huh?" and I'll just nod, because she's right and I know she is.

But an author who is just starting out may need commentary on many levels. From how to open a story to where to end a paragraph, from word choice to dialogue, from story to character. When I teach introduction to creative writing I don't let my students write a whole story to start with, simply because they will give me ten pages that require so much commentary it would take me longer to comment than it did for them to write it.

I once had a graduate student in creative writing who was very talented. She was writing her master's thesis -- a collection of short stories -- under my direction. She had a whole file of stories she said were "junk", but I asked to see them anyway. She believed that they were junk because a previous teacher had handed them back to her with the words "not worth the effort" written on them. But in that pile of rejected stories (about seven of them) I found four that had wonderful promise. Strong characters in interesting conflicts, but the rest of the story was in poor shape and needed extensive work. Over a summer I worked with her on those four stories. Each went through ten or even fifteen revisions, and she worked them into something wonderful. But it took tremendous effort.

The moral of that story is that the wrong reader can do a great deal of damage; the right reader is just the beginning of a long writing process.

I am sure that some or even many of the people who ask me to read their work are talented. They may need direction and help, and need it very sincerely. If I am not the person to provide it, what other choices do they have?

My strongest suggestion is to make connections to other writers around you. Community colleges often have classes in creative writing. Even if a new writer feels they are beyond the "introduction" stage, this can be a great way to make contact to others with the same interests and concerns. I found my first writing group (an excellent one) through a creative writing class. The other real advantage of taking such a course is this: it teaches you to accept constructive criticism gracefully, something that is often very hard for beginning writers, but absolutely necessary.

If for whatever reason it isn't possible to take a course, then there are very good writing communities on-line. I highly recommend the authors' forum at CompuServe, which includes sections where people submit and critique each other's work, according to genre. CompuServe was very helpful to me when I was in the early stages of writing Into the Wilderness. Finally, I am always happy to suggest two books which were (and still are) helpful to me. The first one because it looks at the nuts-and bolts of putting together fiction with great insight, wonderful examples, and most of all, common sense; the second one because it is hopeful and wise and funny.


Jane Burroway. Writing Fiction: A Guide to Narrative Craft. 5th edition July 1999. Addison-Wesley Pub Co. ISBN: 0321026896

Anne Lamott. Bird by Bird. October 1995. Anchor Books/Doubleday. ISBN: 0385480016


Writing is a demanding business, but a rewarding one. It's hard for everybody; take comfort in that. And then get down to work.

not playing nice

I thought the rating system for individual posts was worth a try, but I was wrong. Within five minutes of putting up a new post, somebody (and it's one person, given the IP address) voted three times, each time with a one (=worst). Whether that's out of general dislike of me, the weblog, the rating system, or just plain bad manners, I have no idea. In any case, it makes it clear that I have to bag the whole experiment.

hide the crayons



I make no secret of the fact that I like to work with graphics. So I was trying to come up with a small advertisement for Tied to the Tracks, and this is the result. I'm planning on putting it (or something like it) in the right hand column, but first, can I ask:

What do you think?

What associations come to mind?

How does the tag line strike you? (And I hasten to add: this is my invention. Probably not the one Putnam will go with.)

Would this ad make you look more closely at a novel?

fair enough

There's a comment to yesterday's post that I wanted to pull up into the light of day:

Erm, I'm pretty sure that most of the novels that I consider great, from Jane Eyre on down to White Noise, break some or most of these rules. If this is intended to be advice for beginners, then I'm sure it's all sensible enough, but something about how you're stating them chafes.

My response: yes. absolutely. I should have begun this whole venture with the usual disclaimer, so here it is:

Rules of thumb are not graven in stone. They are guidelines. Every one of them has been broken, and broken successfully. I am just one more writer who was a teacher, with one approach. I have had some success with these rules as my point of departure.

So why provide these guidelines, I'm asking myself. I came up with some reasons:

1. to air out my thoughts and regain perspective (on this count I can say, the weblog has been useful for me)
2. to share what experience I have that might be useful to writers at an earlier stage in their careers (see disclaimer above)
3. to start conversations

Point three is where things haven't really gone the way I thought they might. I rarely get a substantive comment that might be the beginning of a conversation, although the same Guest Commenter did provide one in response to this entry (Rule 5):

This seems to depend on the prose form. Short stories don't require that the characters change; in fact, I find many shorts in which the character does experience some kind of epiphany or transformation to be rather artificial. Often the thing that changes in a short story is not the change in the main characters, but the reader's understanding of them. Consider, e.g., George Saunders's "The End of FIRPO in the World", which is a terrific story but I have a hard time isolating any change in the main character. (The main character does die, but I submit that this isn't an "interesting" kind of change.)

So why don't I get these kinds of comments and following from them, conversations? A few different possible reasons come to mind.

1. my usual readers just aren't that interested;
2. my approach does grate, as Guest Commenter suggests;
3. this isn't a good venue for such discussions.

I put up the new feature that allows readers to rate the posts for just this reason, to see what's interesting and useful and what isn't. If a clear pattern emerges, I'll just stop doing whatever it is that isn't working.

One thing I can't do, though, is change my voice. Because there is the possibility -- even the probability -- that what grates on Guest Commenter's ear is just me. My personality, the way I present myself to the world. In which case, I suspect we'll just have to do without each other's company.

Back to work.


Rule 7: yakety yak

Rule 7.

Dialogue makes or breaks a novel.

Things to remember about dialogue:

1. Only put the really important stuff in direct dialogue.
2. Avoid long speeches. Try indirect speech or internal monologue instead.
3. A character can say a lot without saying anything directly.
4. Avoid drawing attention to the mechanics with elaborate tag lines, she exclaimed.
5. At all costs, avoid trying to get across dialect (social or geographic variation) by means of spelling. Not only is it terrifically hard to do, there's a real danger it will look as though you are condescending to some of your characters.
6. There are better ways to handle this. Word choice and syntax if you need to establish character through dialogue.
7. If you're writing historical fiction, for dog's sake, do your homework.